Self-introduction (Formal)


Dear Professor Brad,

The purpose of this letter is to introduce myself as a student currently in your class of effective communication. My name is Ian Koh from Sustainable Infrastructure Engineering (Land). I graduated from Singapore Polytechnic in 2016 with a diploma in Electrical & Electronics Engineering.

I decided to join SIE (Land), as it allowed me to explore deeper in the ever-changing world of the land transport industry. Due to our country lack of land and resources, I believe that being sustainable is essential.

As a Singapore citizen, I had gone through national service and posted as a network specialist. It requires us to manage the SAF networks. The end user that faced difficulties would contact us and that is where my strength as a mindful listener comes in. As time to time, we would have frustrated user calling us and complaining about their situation. In order to have a conversation, we need to be patient and mindful. Proper guidance could only be given when we fully understood the situation, as for that we would hold a meeting with the user to get more information. After gathering the necessary information, we were required to type an incident report and present it to our superior. Having a weak foundation of English grammar, I was to unable to type an organized and well-structured report, also I was unable to present it well due to my lack of confidence.

Knowing that both writing and presenting skill is a basis for working society. I decided that my goals in this module are to strengthen both my writing and presenting skill, so as to prepare for my future.

Best regards,

Ian

Comments

  1. Brad Blackstone17 September 2018 at 00:57

    Dear Ian,

    Thank you very much for this detailed reflection. I appreciate the scope of your description, and the way you attempt to show us something about who you are.

    I'm interested in your SDF experience, but honestly, I have a hard time understanding what you have written. For example, you mention being a network specialist, but I have no idea what that refers to or even what an SAF network is. Be careful about making such assumptions in your writing.

    Also, you mention the 'end user,' but I don't know what that might be.

    In terms of how to improve this post, you also need to review your sentence structure. Here are two examples:

    1. Having a weak foundation of English grammar, I was to unable to type an organized and well-structured report, also I was unable to present it well due to my lack of confidence.
    >>>
    Having a weak foundation of English grammar, I was unable to develop well-structured report. Also, I was unable to present it well due to my lack of confidence.

    2. Knowing that both writing and presenting skill is a basis for working society. I decided....
    >>>
    Knowing that both writing and presenting skills ARE the basis for working professionally, I decided to....

    Let's get to work on this.

    I look forward to assisting you this term.

    Regards,

    Brad

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  2. Unknown20 September 2018 at 03:29

    Hi Ian,

    Thank you for sharing such an insightful introduction.

    There are some pointers which i feel you could improve on:

    - Capitalization: names of your courses does not require capitalizing.

    "My name is Ian Koh from sustainable infrastructure engineering (land). I graduated from Singapore Polytechnic in 2016 with a diploma in electrical & electronics engineering."

    - Paragraphing: I would like to suggest having 1 paragraph each for your strengths and weaknesses for a more organized letter.

    Overall, I really enjoyed reading!

    Cheers
    Bernadine

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